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Name, please

All these names they pass by,
Stupid and geeky little small-fry.
So many names on this wall.
Where children were once small.
They once stood so frail, so slight
Moved into motion and out of sight.

They moved into the sky, into the earth
Until they reached the sun of their birth.
Standing into the silly shadows of man.
Where they became fishes in a can.
Where they fell into the inky black holes
Of the past and future doubts to be moles.

They stood above the towers glancing
At the flames that came prancing.
The flames that grew as they were born
Forever to rise and to never be torn.
But they tried to fight it but it stood
It stood too strong and burned the oak wood.

There they once stood by the wall.
Laughing and playing still small.
Then they changed and names came
Like water from a pipe and it wasn't tame.
They grew into beings with fire and might
But not one knew if they'd bring death or light.
©2009-2010 ~luminusflame
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Hm, would a hedgehog mascot be nice?

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:icondyien:
hmm.. this is really good but I'm not sure what it's about... care to explain? :)

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Thanks for the comment. Um, the first stanza is about children who are growing up and starting to learn how to call each other names. Then they begin to learn the ways of society sometimes losing their dreams to fit into the roles they are expected to fill. The third one is when they earn their voices and try to shake off the teachings of society and the influence of others, to be better but it's too strong and they can't fight it off. The last one is just a recap of the first to the third and finally how the children now older have the power to change the world, but no one knows if they'll do it for the good or the bad of the world.
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thanks, makes more sense now :) fav'd it cuz I really liked it :) by the way, isn't the "to" in "It stood to strong and burned the oak wood" meant to be a "too"?

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Ah, yeah thanks for telling me that. :)

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